The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Mind Books" explores the metaphor of a person's thoughts being compared to fairy tale books, with truths and secrets laid bare like ink between the pages. The imagery of perusing the chapters of her mind, suffering paper cuts, and seeking treasures or curses is vivid and engaging. The contrast between love and pain, truth and lies, is effectively portrayed through the imagery of dragons, fountains, and siren songs.

One suggestion for improvement would be to consider the consistency of the metaphors throughout the poem. While the imagery of fairy tale books and perusing chapters is strong, the introduction of dragons, fountains, and sirens could be further developed or connected back to the central theme of exploring someone's mind. Ensuring that each metaphor or image serves to enhance the overall message of the poem can help create a more cohesive and impactful piece.

Additionally, paying attention to the flow and structure of the poem could further enhance its impact. Consider experimenting with the line breaks, stanza lengths,

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this poem/revelation of yours packs a massive punch! I was bowled over with the first reading!
the second reading left me in awe of your writing skills! These are my favorite lines:

Did she ever once feel a thing?
Of that love that cut me to the bone

A love that sinned by simply being,
A love I murder every waking day.

Lest it raise its lying beak and sing,
The siren's song, there by the bay.

they stirred my soul to remembrance! thank you for this!

*hugs, Cat

Lovely, and very tender. Wonderful metaphor and language. In reading, what caught me was the unusual rhyme scheme. It doesn't seem to be consistent, and yet it is really interesting! I especially was taken with stanzas 5,6, and 7. This is where the rhyme pattern takes a different path. Don't know if it is intentional, but I think it is pretty cool. I would suggest not use "pages" so close together in stanzas 3 and 4. However, I really love "suffer a thousand paper cuts from her pages." Great poetry!
Thank you!
L

Great choice of words, nice poetry, muchly enjoyed!

Obi.

...the mystery of not knowing. That is one of the great things about the sea when you are a thousand leagues out. Of course, there are challenges and some quite intimidating.

Your poem shows improvement over what I usually read from you and I found the metaphor of comparing her mind to a book intriguing and enjoyable. I find the title "Mind Books" could be improved. It seems a little weak compared to the poem's content.

In the second last line, the reference "lying beak" is misplaced. I can relate it to nothing else in the poem. The last line references a siren, which I found to be one of the better lines in the poem, but I just can't relate a beak to a siren.

Overall, the theme is good and your language use is as well. It's definitely worth going over with a critical comb.

Thomas