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Fear
I can feel your footsteps
pounding in my chest,
ringing in my ears
like thunder
rolling through the forest
rattling the branches
shaking the dew
from my eyes.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Jackweb
Mon, 2022-07-04 23:25
Welcome to neopoet!
The poem is embroidered with visual imagery. What imagery does is to appease to reader's imaginations and senses. It quite a figurative language used to represent something.
Obviously, the main theme of this piece is fear of uncertainty.
Apt but powerful!
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Kristen H.
Mon, 2022-07-04 23:53
Thank you for commenting! I
Thank you for commenting! I appreciate the feedback!
Jackweb
Tue, 2022-07-05 01:40
You are welcome !
Looking forward to read more of your piece.
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Candlewitch
Tue, 2022-07-05 05:02
hello!
rattling the branches
shaking the dew
from my eyes.
this is amazingly poignant! I love it!!!
always, Cat
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Kristen H.
Tue, 2022-07-05 17:29
Thank you so much!!
Thank you so much!!
Rosewood Apothecary
Tue, 2022-07-05 06:34
Woah!
There’s is a tremendous amount of information stuffed into 8 lines. Excellent choices were made in the composition. You said a lot with the minimal amount of words and that’s way more impressive than most people think. Well done.
Tim
Kristen H.
Tue, 2022-07-05 17:30
Wow, thank you so much!
Wow, thank you so much!
One
Wed, 2022-07-06 03:17
Hello
8 lines of pure intensity!
Doesn't get much better than that. Most of us take 30+ lines to get our point across...you just delivered the punch in one breath.
Perfect!
One.
.
"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"
Kristen H.
Wed, 2022-07-06 08:45
Thank you!
Wow! Thank you so much, One!
Mr joghe
Wed, 2022-07-06 18:20
I like the title.
I like the title.
Also I like the lines of the poem.
"I can feel your footsteps
pounding in my chest,
ringing in my ears
like thunder"
You've given life to an inanimate object (fear) with the use of imagery. You referred to 'fear' as a host or vector that ravaged your heart like thunder.
"Like thunder" it's the use of simile to show an indirect comparison between thunder and fear.
Good write!
"Words are currency of ideas and have the power to change world. Ride your pen on the rough road."
Rosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2022-07-06 19:11
It’s so good
Ridiculous really.
Kristen H.
Wed, 2022-07-06 19:55
Thank you!
Wow, thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Kristen H.
Wed, 2022-07-06 19:54
Thank you!
Thank you so much!
RoseBlack
Fri, 2022-07-08 09:22
Short and Intense
The image of someone running from whatever is haunting them and that whatever getting so close their footsteps ring out. Leaves the reader longing for more of the story! Great write.
~RoseBlack~
Kristen H.
Fri, 2022-07-08 10:38
Thank you!
I love your interpretation of the poem! This is my exact reason for not giving any insight as to what I wrote it about. It leaves room for others to see what they see and feel what they feel when they read it. Thank you for the feedback!
RoseBlack
Fri, 2022-07-08 11:07
The best kind of poem
In my opinion, is the kind that you draw your own conclusions. Well done
~RoseBlack~
Kristen H.
Fri, 2022-07-08 12:59
I agree
I feel the same way with both poems and music. Personal interpretations are the best, in my opinion.