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Romantic - bad man

You looked at me , with those mad eyes.
I am lonely. Was that, eh the surprise.

I don’t know, Is that right ?
Should I be in love,
with your smile.

With those eyes.

I look into everyday,
just to say that was a good day,

have a good night

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Comments

I don't see how the title reflects the poem, perhaps it is my fault for not comprehending it. I like how it flows from beginning to ending. I think this is one of your better productions! thank you for a nice read!

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Hello hug cat, I read your comment. It is interesting, but, I want to know the poem you are emphasizing.

am puzzled by the "Bad man" part. Nice work though. ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

In your poem, the theme of confusion helps to understand the state of the poet when she was writing the poem.
Also I learned the effect of love on the lover who tried to lure the poet into his game but the poet only appreciated his love but not sure if she fell for him.

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