The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "THE ZOMBIE APOCALYPSE" presents a vivid and engaging narrative from the perspective of a zombie during a post-apocalyptic scenario. It effectively uses macabre and dark humor to provide a unique take on the zombie genre.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and meter. The varying line lengths and syllable counts disrupt the flow of the poem. For example, the first stanza has a rhythmic pattern that is not maintained in the subsequent stanzas. A consistent rhythmic pattern would enhance the overall reading experience and musicality of the poem.

The use of language and imagery is generally effective, but there are instances where the choice of words could be improved for greater impact. For instance, the phrase "the flesh I carried turned to black" could be rephrased for clarity and to avoid potential confusion about who the flesh belongs to.

The poem also tends to tell rather than show. For example, in the line "I am the zombie leader you should follow to survive," the poem could instead show how the speaker leads and why others should follow. This would allow the reader to infer the speaker's role and importance, which can be more engaging and impactful.

The ending of the poem effectively conveys a sense of finality and doom, fitting for a zombie apocalypse narrative. However, the transition to this ending could be smoother. The sudden shift from the speaker's hunger and search for food to the impending end of days is a bit jarring. A more gradual build-up to this conclusion could enhance the overall narrative arc of the poem.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more nuanced exploration of its themes. While the zombie apocalypse is a compelling backdrop, the poem could delve deeper into the implications of this scenario, such as the loss of humanity and the struggle for survival. This would add depth and complexity to the poem, making it more thought-provoking for the reader.

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is atrocious, but the humor and wit, more than make up for it. Yeah, I'm still watching the "Walking Dead", and the spin-offs.
I think adding the nuns and the religious aspect to it has made it more watchable. Of course, it's going to be the same old story, there's nothing new under the sun, just something you haven't seen before.
~ Geez.
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I've found the rhyme good, but the rhythm sucks, your beats are out of whack. No, haven't seen the film "It Stains the Sands Red" I'll make sure to look it up. ~ Geez.
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I love everything about this! The visuals were fantastic! Your dark side is phenomenal! Well done

I too love Zombies, met a few when I had a spell working for the probation service. Anyway, loved this. If you haven't seen it may I suggest the French Zombie Film 'The Horde'. Alex

thanks for this tasty morsel of darkness... I loved it all from every aspect! a great frolicking romp!

*eddy styx
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