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Wraith

Submitted by Indivisible_Origin on Mon, 2023-02-27 04:18

Yesterday
Trust was a wet fish
Nearly dead and dinner
Contorting to breathe
In a world without water

Tonight
I’m a wraith
between worlds
Seeking solace
Visage vague
Feeling familiar

Tomorrow
I’m details
Diligence due
Pacing steps left
by lesser men
Unspun yarn
rotting in the loom

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Lavender

Mon, 2023-02-27 10:01

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Good morning, Poet,
The sense of uncertainty of self, purpose, perhaps place in a demanding, but still lonely world - both on a personal level, and universally. Beautiful alliteration throughout. Strong title that equals your final line.
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Abby

Mon, 2023-02-27 10:11

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This poem feels really strong to me. The consistent use of metaphor and personification of trust. I think, also, the language flows really nicely. And I enjoyed how each stanza was a different time frame, good idea.

"To fly is to fall."

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