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Who The Heck Are You?!

Submitted by Lavender on Wed, 2024-10-16 21:18

I had a foggy nightmare
about the clothes we shed

now tossed around the room
unraveled and unthread

so let me get a cuppa joe
to clear my aching head

then get your shiny naked bum
out of my tainted bed!

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Not entering in the Waking Up Naked contest... but the theme kinda renders itself to such poetry.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Michael Anthony

Wed, 2024-10-16 23:35

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Ah, the mistakes we sometimes make! Enjoyed this one L, and a bit of a chuckle too - thank you!

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Lavender

Thu, 2024-10-17 08:20

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The cheeky side of my muse appears every once in a while!
Thank you for reading!
L

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2024-10-17 06:02

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Ahhh... I remember when I was young and stupid (now, I am old and stupid, lol!) you put a smile on my face and roses in my cheeks. Thank you, I really like this poem. I think you should enter it in the contest!

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Lavender

Thu, 2024-10-17 08:23

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It's not really for the contest. My saucy muse just got the better of me.
Thank you for reading!
Lx

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Geezer

Thu, 2024-10-17 10:05

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and [cheeky]. Get it? Cheeky? Anyhow, thought it a lot of fun, but maybe you could find another word, rather than [tainted]?
~ Geez.
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Lavender

Thu, 2024-10-17 10:13

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Didn't connect "cheeky" - you are so clever! Toss me another word for "tainted" and I'll be glad to think it over!
Thank you for your help with this shameless piece! :)
Lx

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Geezer

Thu, 2024-10-17 10:24

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two words? [Nice, warm] bed. Stands to reason that if the bed is nice and warm, you wouldn't want to get out of it. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Thu, 2024-10-17 10:31

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Ha, ha! Well... in the narrator's mind, the bed is now ruined and should probably be burned, if that gives you a hint.
Thanks!

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Geezer

Thu, 2024-10-17 14:23

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I didn't know that it was a case of "What the Hell did I do last night?" In that case, I guess your word is just as good as the one I would pick, [wretched]. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Thu, 2024-10-17 16:01

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...a pretty remorseful morning.
Thanks!
L

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Rula

Thu, 2024-10-17 12:49

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Whatever you write with the word "naked" something saucy should come to the mind. Yours is a clever one and has a real potential!
I wonder why not to enter that contest... Just wondering.

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Lavender

Thu, 2024-10-17 16:13

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Just having a bit of poetic fun with this saucy, clever theme!
Thank you for reading!
Lx

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