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Ask Me To Dance

Submitted by Lavender on Tue, 2024-09-03 23:41

Ask me to dance.
Reach for my hand and lead me
across the floor.
Pause, then pull me close.
Closer.

Hold me like a hungry kiss
as the rhythm of my breath slows down
settling some place between your body and mine,
warm and captive, yet somehow
unshackled.

Rest your hand
on the small of my back
where your touch excites my skin
and my inhibitions become
unlaced.

Ask me to dance.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2024-09-04 04:43

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these lines of your exquisite poem are my favorites:

Hold me like a hungry kiss
as the rhythm of my breath slows down
settling some place between your body and mine,
warm and captive, yet somehow
unshackled.

I would not change a word of it! I love it all! Cat

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Lavender

Wed, 2024-09-04 10:42

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I'm a romantic when it comes to dancing, which I haven't done in a very long time. Aah, well!
Thank you for reading!
Lx

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Geezer

Wed, 2024-09-04 09:54

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A perfect description of asking someone you admire and want to know, to dance. There was this girl at the school dance...
Exactly how I felt! Like Cat, I wouldn't change a thing. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Wed, 2024-09-04 10:44

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Your comment really hits home. Funny to hear both sides. (I hope you asked her!)
Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts!
L

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Geezer

Wed, 2024-09-04 22:16

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I did, and it was as heavenly as described! ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Lavender

Wed, 2024-09-04 22:29

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I'm so glad!

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captain 2

Thu, 2024-09-05 02:39

Very beautiful! So clear, simple and true.

Lavender

Thu, 2024-09-05 21:27

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I appreciate your comment!
Thank you for reading!
L

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