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Who The Heck Are You?!
I had a foggy nightmare
about the clothes we shed
now tossed around the room
unraveled and unthread
so let me get a cuppa joe
to clear my aching head
then get your shiny naked bum
out of my tainted bed!
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Not entering in the Waking Up Naked contest... but the theme kinda renders itself to such poetry.
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Michael Anthony
Wed, 2024-10-16 23:35
Ah, the mistakes we sometimes
Ah, the mistakes we sometimes make! Enjoyed this one L, and a bit of a chuckle too - thank you!
Best
Michael Anthony
Lavender
Thu, 2024-10-17 08:20
Hello, Michael!
The cheeky side of my muse appears every once in a while!
Thank you for reading!
L
Candlewitch
Thu, 2024-10-17 06:02
Dear Lavender,
Ahhh... I remember when I was young and stupid (now, I am old and stupid, lol!) you put a smile on my face and roses in my cheeks. Thank you, I really like this poem. I think you should enter it in the contest!
*hugs, Cat
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Lavender
Thu, 2024-10-17 08:23
Hello, Cat!
It's not really for the contest. My saucy muse just got the better of me.
Thank you for reading!
Lx
Geezer
Thu, 2024-10-17 10:05
Saucy...
and [cheeky]. Get it? Cheeky? Anyhow, thought it a lot of fun, but maybe you could find another word, rather than [tainted]?
~ Geez.
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Lavender
Thu, 2024-10-17 10:13
Hello, Geezer!
Didn't connect "cheeky" - you are so clever! Toss me another word for "tainted" and I'll be glad to think it over!
Thank you for your help with this shameless piece! :)
Lx
Geezer
Thu, 2024-10-17 10:24
How about...
two words? [Nice, warm] bed. Stands to reason that if the bed is nice and warm, you wouldn't want to get out of it. ~ Geez.
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Lavender
Thu, 2024-10-17 10:31
Hi, Geezer!
Ha, ha! Well... in the narrator's mind, the bed is now ruined and should probably be burned, if that gives you a hint.
Thanks!
Geezer
Thu, 2024-10-17 14:23
Sorry...
I didn't know that it was a case of "What the Hell did I do last night?" In that case, I guess your word is just as good as the one I would pick, [wretched]. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Lavender
Thu, 2024-10-17 16:01
Yep, that's the idea...
...a pretty remorseful morning.
Thanks!
L
Rula
Thu, 2024-10-17 12:49
Hello Lavender
Whatever you write with the word "naked" something saucy should come to the mind. Yours is a clever one and has a real potential!
I wonder why not to enter that contest... Just wondering.
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Lavender
Thu, 2024-10-17 16:13
Hello, Rula!
Just having a bit of poetic fun with this saucy, clever theme!
Thank you for reading!
Lx