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WHAT ARE WE

Submitted by Sheddie on Thu, 2023-09-14 17:50

In shadows cast by history's cruel hand,
Where hearts are torn, thrown into the festival of famine,
We ask many questions, withering away in the palm of endless strife,
"What are we, in the shelter of life?"

A world of colours, cultures, intertwined,
Yet prejudice still festers in the mind,
Discrimination poisoning the taste of the heart
Leaving wounds that time alone can never erase.

From deep within, let empathy arise,
Break down the walls that blind our human eyes,
In the university of love there's no diversity
In unity, our hands can wipe away the tears from our eyes

Let's rise above the hatred and the fear,
Hold hands, and wipe away each other's tears,
In every face, find worth and beauty, seen,
What are we? A miracle of unity.

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Thu, 2023-09-14 23:51

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "WHAT ARE WE" explores themes of identity, prejudice, empathy, and unity. The imagery and language used effectively convey the message of the poem. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be strengthened:

1. Consider the use of clichés: The line "In the shelter of life" is a common phrase that may not add much depth or originality to the poem. Try to find a more unique and evocative way to express the idea.

2. Develop the metaphor: The poem introduces the metaphor of the "university of love" but does not fully explore or expand upon it. Consider delving deeper into this metaphor to provide a richer understanding of how unity and empathy can overcome prejudice and discrimination.

3. Show, don't tell: While the poem effectively conveys its message, it could benefit from incorporating more concrete and specific examples to illustrate the impact of prejudice and the power of unity. This would help to engage the reader on a more personal and

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