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These Things
You were the smiling face
I looked for when I had a bad
day at school.
The one I gave an apology to
when I had no reason too.
I always had a heart for you
even the feelings as well.
So I hope you save a place for me
when I stop breathing in this hell.
I loved you with all my heart
and soul secretly weird crust too
and I hope I see you in a better place
so I can tell all these things
to you.
Style / type:
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Last few words:
This is a very important poem to me. It's about a cousin by marriage who was took at too young of an age and I miss him very much.
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Not Explicit Content
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