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Something In The Mist
There is something
in the mist
I can see it in
your eyes.
Why hide behind
the anger and
all the little lies.
I love you my dear
forever but
I can see there
is something wrong.
I am yours forever
so please stop
hiding all day long.
My love for you will
never change
but I hope the mist
will fade.
Come back to me
with your smiling
face from the mist
that's dark and damp
with weight.
The mist has
covered up everything
that you are please don't
let it do no more.
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