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School Days

School days as a twin, were filled with laughter and fun
Never apart, we were always as one

The teachers didn’t know which one of us was which
So they just called us both by the same name, it was bliss

We were often mistaken as the same student
But we always had actions that were prudent

We were both the same in so many ways
But created different forms of praise

We were at every single level compared
Be it math or English, we were never spared

We had the same teachers, the same class
Always striving our courses to pass

We would never forget our school days as twins
Our minds will be filled with our school day wins

School days will for my brother and me
Always remain a pleasurable journey for us to see

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem, "School Days," effectively communicates the unique experience of being a twin in a school setting. The rhyming couplets and consistent rhythm create a pleasant reading experience and reinforce the theme of unity between the twins.

However, the poem could benefit from more specificity and sensory detail. For instance, instead of stating that the school days were filled with laughter and fun, the poem could show specific incidents that evoke these feelings. Similarly, the line "we were always as one" could be replaced with a concrete example that illustrates their togetherness.

The poem also tends to tell rather than show. For example, the line "we were both the same in so many ways" could be more effective if it showed how they were the same. The same goes for the line "we were at every single level compared." Showing specific instances of comparison could make the poem more engaging and relatable.

The poem could also delve deeper into the emotional implications of being a twin. While it touches on the fun and convenience of being mistaken for each other, it could also explore the challenges and complexities of constantly being compared and mistaken for each other.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more consistent tense. The shift from past tense in the beginning to present tense in the end is a bit jarring. Sticking to one tense could make the poem more cohesive.

In conclusion, while the poem effectively conveys the unique experience of being a twin in school, it could benefit from more specificity, showing rather than telling, deeper emotional exploration, and consistent tense.

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