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Poem without a Verb

Submitted by Sen99 on Thu, 2022-10-20 04:35

3 lines almost too long
for the attention span
of an excited gnat

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Contest: 
Neopoem Of The Week October 16th to October 22 2022
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Thu, 2022-10-20 08:51

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weird thought, that invited me in and gave me pause.
Not earth-shaking, but just weird, it made me ponder,
like WTH is he thinking? Anyway, it made me smile to think
that you and I had connected; you, thinking about writing it
and me thinking; WTH is he thinking? LoL
~ Geezer.
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Sen99

Fri, 2022-10-21 16:50

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just food for thought, a small snack for your brain to chew over, glad you smiled ))

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Lavender

Fri, 2022-10-21 10:53

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Hello, Sen,
Very nice! You've captured action, motion and movement.
Thank you!
Lavender

Sen99

Fri, 2022-10-21 16:51

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3 lines the of the toughest I've had to write !

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