The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem presents an interesting and humorous twist on the classic tale of Red Riding Hood, incorporating elements of satire and modern references. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

1. Consistency in rhyme scheme: The poem seems to follow an AABB rhyme scheme in the first two stanzas, but deviates in the last stanza. To maintain consistency, consider revising the last stanza to follow the same rhyme scheme.

2. Rhythm and meter: The poem's rhythm is somewhat irregular, which can make it difficult to read smoothly. Consider revising the lines to have a more consistent meter, such as iambic pentameter or another suitable pattern.

3. Punctuation and capitalization: Some lines have inconsistent punctuation and capitalization. For example, the second line ends with a comma, while the fourth line ends with a period. Maintaining consistency in punctuation and capitalization will help improve the poem's readability.

4. Clarity: Some lines may be confusing to readers, such as "Greedy lust, all night long with the big bad werewolf in the bed we share." Consider rephrasing this line to make the meaning more apparent.

5. Imagery and word choice: The poem has some vivid imagery, but there is room for improvement. For example, "he eyes me greedy as a snake" could be rephrased to create a more striking image, such as "his eyes, like a snake's, filled with greed."

Overall, the poem offers a fresh and entertaining perspective on the Red Riding Hood story. By addressing the suggestions above, the poem can be further refined and its impact on readers enhanced.

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I needed a good laugh this morning. I used to tell my niece and nephews, what we called Uncle Guy's Twisted Bedtime Stories. While staying with my sister, they used to beg me for bedtime stories. Sometimes, they would get laughing and making so much noise, that my sis would throw me out of the room. "That is not what bedtime stories are supposed to do, riling them up, you are supposed to be calming them down"! Of course, there was no profanity or sex, but some things that were not exactly what bedtime tales were supposed to be. I love what you have done here! Yeah, I always thought that "Red" had a thing for that wolf. "Oh my, what big eyes you have, what a big nose you have, what a big... Well, you get the idea...
I guess that you might have trimmed the lines and made quatrains, but... I found this a delightful read, and I'm sure there will be others that feel the same way. Nice! ~ Geez.
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I love your twisted take on this old tale of Red Ridding hood and the wolf. the story always made me wonder which one was the predator and who was the real victim! granny seamed to be a hip old chick this is a great read! well done!

*love, Cat

Hello, Ruby!
I agree with Geezer and Cat - a delightful read, and a great twist to the original! Hope Grandma makes it big in Vegas!
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Are some of my favorites to read and write. I believe I have written of Red's sister, Black Riding Hood a time or two. But then again, I've always had a thing for the Wolf...

As I got older how fairy tales seemed less magical and the dark adult undertones and realities played out as I experienced life. Maybe our interpretation as we get older is based on what we have lived through. While the wolf is a stalker, predator and depicted as a serial killer...there is something that attracts people....perhaps it is their beauty...strength and apparent charm at first glance...

A clever twist on the fairy tale!
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I had to laugh at this very twisted tale.