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The cloak camouflaged smoke-grey sky a
mask above, and the unsteady drunk
trees shedding its coat of gold leaves

scuttling, scraping, skidding to another

location travelling to random places, supported
by the sail of gust like a sailboat unsteady without
a sea captain and no destination

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Thank you for sharing your poem, "NATURES PERFORMANCE." I appreciate your creativity in describing the elements of nature. Here are a few suggestions to consider:

1. Imagery: Your use of imagery is effective in creating a vivid picture of the scene. However, it would be helpful to provide more specific details to enhance the reader's experience. For example, instead of "smoke-grey sky," you could describe the sky as "a cloak of ashen clouds" or "a murky veil of mist." Adding specific details can make the imagery more engaging and memorable.

2. Structure: The poem appears to be written in free verse, which allows for flexibility in form and structure. However, consider experimenting with line breaks and stanza breaks to create a more deliberate rhythm and flow. This can help guide the reader through the poem and emphasize certain phrases or ideas.

3. Clarity: While the poem contains intriguing descriptions, the overall meaning or message may not be immediately clear. It would be beneficial

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You have captured some nice imagery in a concise and poetic way, clever word choices especially lines about "drunken trees shedding ..... coat of gold leaves ". Enjoyable and evocative

I'm glad you grasped what I was portraying

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I also very much admired that makes the poem shine!

*hugs, Cat

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