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NATURE'S ENDLESS BOUNTY

Submitted by William Lynn on Tue, 2023-05-16 10:23

With sun upon my weathered face
On mountain trail with stream below,
I walk this trail and think about
The beauty nature has to show.

So many things bring pleasure
Like whispered tales from trees,
Or the touch of nature's kind embrace
All the senses sure to please.

The beauty of the flowers
The vastness of the sky,
I close my eyes and listen
To the birds that sing on high.

I love the sounds of morning
And the gentle sounds of eve,
And the glee of little children
As they discover times like these.

I wish that all could know
The wonders that abound,
As simple pleasures show us
The magic to be found.

The forest or the mountain top
Deep canyons or the sea,
The dessert with it's windswept views
Through joyful eyes I see.

So I'll stop and feel this moment
And just listen for a while,
As I savor nature's bounty
With full heart, I gently smile.

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Overall, this poem captures the beauty and wonder of nature through vivid imagery and sensory descriptions. The language is simple and accessible, making the message easy to understand and relatable to readers of all ages. However, some of the lines feel a bit clichéd or predictable, such as "The beauty of the flowers" or "I love the sounds of morning." It would be more impactful to see these ideas expressed in a unique or surprising way.

One suggested line edit: In the line "Or the touch on nature's kind embrace," consider changing "kind" to a more specific adjective that evokes a particular quality of nature's embrace, such as "gentle," "warm," or "reassuring." This would add depth and specificity to the image.

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