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Mouths

Submitted by Indivisible_Origin on Mon, 2023-02-20 16:53

save those pretty knees
for the men that made
those mouths you feed
circle back to me
when you remember
how to find your beast
you and me
we don't make mouths
we make memories
the mouth I need
growls and forgets
what human means
the woman I feed
arches her back
makes a mockery of modest
and a meal out of me

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not actively editing
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Not Explicit Content

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Rosewood Apothecary

Mon, 2023-02-20 19:50

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Where is everyone on this? I drove over an hour both ways and worked all day on holiday…and come home, read this and there are no comments. None of ladies have spoken their dreamy dreams. Men, take notes.

Awesome job,
Tim

Indivisible_Origin

Tue, 2023-02-21 00:17

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Thanks man! You're too much. Boo to work on the holiday but kind thanks for taking time to read me when your day was over.

Best, IO

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Indivisible_Origin

Tue, 2023-02-21 00:19

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Yah I respect that. This piece's intended wasn't thrilled about it either but she didn't say it near as polite as you. Thank you as always for reading. I appreciate it

IO

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-02-22 09:55

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I fall down at almost anything you write...AND, I Loved this poem!!!

*hugs and smiles, Cat

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Indivisible_Origin

Fri, 2023-02-24 02:18

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You are always so kind and supportive. Thank you for this. I'm sure I'll write something eventually you won't love. Not that I'd ever try :)

IO

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Candlewitch

Fri, 2023-02-24 06:52

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I always look for the good in everything, but I will always tell you my truth...

*hugs, Cat

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