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Monthly Halloween contest
There I am standing in
at the midnight hour
that it is approaching
embracing at my own pace
alone and frightening
by the haunting sound
of the crying souls
Fear shooting down to
my spine
as I am feeling weak to
my knees
at the cemetery passing
greeting by the howling
wind and the dancing of the
tombstones stay
causing my heart skipping a beat
to find a way to escape
from this dreadful place
that is reminding me that death
is coming on this day
Friday the 13th
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Fri, 2023-10-13 07:20
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem effectively uses imagery and sensory language to create a chilling atmosphere, which is fitting for a poem centered around Halloween and Friday the 13th. The use of phrases such as "the haunting sound of the crying souls" and "the dancing of the tombstones" helps to paint a vivid picture in the reader's mind.
However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and rhyme scheme. This would help to enhance the overall flow of the poem and make it more engaging for the reader.
Additionally, the poem could be improved by exploring the speaker's emotions and reactions in more depth. While the poem does touch on the speaker's fear, it could delve deeper into these feelings, perhaps by using more metaphorical language or by exploring the speaker's thoughts and reflections.
Finally, the poem could benefit from a more distinct ending. The current ending leaves the reader hanging, and while this can be effective in some cases, in this poem it feels abrupt. A more conclusive ending could help to tie the poem together and leave a lasting impression on the reader.
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