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Magic
A falling star settled on my rose,
a diamond dipped in velvet clothes.
I dared not touch the pure gift
sent from heaven, so swift,
but let it rest there
in such sweet air
and comply
to my
wish.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
A rhyming nonet.
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
tyro
Sun, 2024-06-09 12:50
yes, it is magic, and pure
yes, it is magic, and pure beauty in a way, that it was not immediately touched, but simply admired for its beauty, brings in into the spiritual realm. Great image here. Fully enjoyed reading it.
Tyro
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
Lavender
Sun, 2024-06-09 20:41
Hello, Tyro,
I'm so glad you felt the spiritual essence here, and I'm happy that you enjoyed this!
Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts.
L
Rula
Sun, 2024-06-09 13:16
An amazing nonet
Line two has one beat more to make it a full nonet but it's en easy fix.
The fact that it rhymes makes it a real beauty.
Your magic shows clearly dear Lavender.
Very elegant as always
Thank you for sharing.
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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Lavender
Sun, 2024-06-09 20:51
Hello, My Friend!
Thank you for your lovely comments. I'm wondering if you are speaking of the number of syllables in "diamond." Some variants state 3, others state 2 syllables. I myself use 2 syllables: dia-mond. Please let me know if it's something else. I always appreciate your helping me with my work as I know you are a devoted fan of structured poetry.
Thank you, as always!
Lx
Rula
Mon, 2024-06-10 12:21
Sorry
dear Lavender.
My fault indeed. Yes, I count 3 syllables in diamond.
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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Lavender
Mon, 2024-06-10 13:48
Funny...
how some words can be pronounced differently. I am just tickled that you spend time with my work. I am always grateful!
Lxxx
Clentin
Sat, 2024-06-15 12:53
Really liked your poem. Magic
Really liked your poem. Magic it is!
Liked the form as well.
Lavender
Sun, 2024-06-16 12:04
Hello, Clentin!
I am so happy that you enjoyed this. Structured poetry can be so fulfilling, and fun! I appreciate your time and comments!
L
RoseBlack
Sun, 2024-06-16 03:03
Love this
So simple and sweet yet absolutely captivating. I can see the little star sitting on a rose. Simple imagery says so much. Well done.
~RoseBlack~
Lavender
Sun, 2024-06-16 12:06
Hello, Carrie,
It was intended to be a brief passing moment, just about how long it takes to make a wish.
Thank you for reading! I appreciate you!
Lx
Carrie
Mon, 2024-06-24 01:02
Hi Lavender
Saw this won, congratulations! :)
- Carrie
Lavender
Mon, 2024-06-24 17:53
Hello, Carrie,
Thank you so much! I appreciate it!
L
Words Ablaze
Wed, 2024-07-10 18:56
wow L
the poem on its own is beyond impressive, poetic innovation truly.
And to write it in that shortening line stunt is just showing off haha. Love it
W.
Lavender
Wed, 2024-07-10 21:54
Hello, W!
You are very kind! (A challenge is always a blast.)
Thank you for reading!
L