The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem, "Love Song," employs a variety of poetic devices and explores deep, philosophical themes. However, there are areas where clarity and cohesion could be improved.

In the first stanza, the use of metaphorical language such as "flame burn bright" and "lightning rod" effectively convey the speaker's quest for understanding and truth. However, the transition from this spiritual questioning to the speaker's self-reflection on fame and mortality in the second stanza is somewhat abrupt. Establishing a clearer connection between these themes could enhance the overall coherence of the poem.

The third and fourth stanzas shift the setting to a more urban, gritty environment, with vivid imagery such as "streets anaesthetised, in drink and dope" and "bodies rage with lust." This stark contrast to the more abstract, philosophical musings of the earlier stanzas is striking, but again, the connection between these different elements of the poem could be made more explicit.

The final stanza returns to the theme of spiritual questioning, tying it into the earlier exploration of physical desire and pleasure. The question "Does God reside in love’s devotion?" is a powerful ending that leaves the reader with much to ponder. However, the use of the term "garments lay on floor-strewn" is somewhat unclear. If it is intended to represent the aftermath of physical passion, a more straightforward phrasing might be more effective.

Overall, this poem has a strong thematic core and makes effective use of imagery and metaphor. However, it could benefit from clearer transitions between different themes and settings, as well as more precise language in certain areas.

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the theme and meter waver and weave, I still managed to find the questions relevant.
The rhyme and meter are a mixed bag and intriguing, with some surprising connection to the theme.
There are missing commas, but the pauses are so plain when it is read aloud, that I will let you find where they go.
Very interesting... ~ Geez.
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I very much like that you question! Your questions are not frivolous either. I who do not believe in the Christian god, but in Mother Nature and all things earthy and love, as a deity, now. I very much love your poem especially these lines:

As pleasure passes by too soon,
our thoughts lost in winds of ocean.
And garments lay floor strewn,
Does God reside as love’s devotion?

*hugs & good wishes, Cat

Hello Ruby.
As usual, Geezer has made important observations. I almost always find great guidance in what the Geeze has to say. With that said, I really enjoyed the poem, and like Cat, I too question the existence of God and find organized religion a crock, but that's the way I roll. I enjoyed the poem by itself, but especially like the subject matter.

Thanks for sharing! - Will

Even though I am not a believer either. I do find myself questioning from time to time though. I liked the feel of the poem...the inquisitive nature of the writer, pondering greater things in a broader universe. Well done.

I will tell you how I really feel if you won't ostracize me. I have enjoyed the comments put forth. Though my past may show me a hippocrit. I know there is a God, although I find my own religion a bit frightening. It seems to me that the issue is'nt with deity being man or woman. The issue lies in deities attributes which I am sure we all can agree on. That all that needs to be said
is that God is love. All you need to communicate with him or her is an open mind and heart. It was for me a good rendition
of conditions as they currently exist. Peace or forgiveness isn't as pricy a thing as we believe it to be.