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Little Crimes

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Thu, 2023-02-09 15:16

Sitting on the couch with her feet in their usual spot on my lap

“Are those a pair of my new socks I just bought”

“Fool, I swiped these from you before the pandemic!”

And they look wonderful on her

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How does this theme appeal to you?

How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Last few words:

From my poetry hero... Small poems are drastic examples of poetry's way of squeezing large content into tight spaces. - Billy Collins (from his short poem manifesto, Musical Tables)

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Lavender

Thu, 2023-02-09 20:29

Little Crimes

Hello, Michael,
Wonderful! I see the Billy Collins influence here, especially that final line that ties in with the rest of the poem, but also has a life of its own. I do not have Musical Tables, yet - thanks for the encouragement to get it!
L

Rosewood Apothecary

Fri, 2023-02-10 05:05

I bet they do

This is a nice moment in time. Good for you both!

Tim

Seren

Fri, 2023-02-10 10:51

Dear Michael

This is sigh worthy.

Sigh. A Beautiful minute moment to treasure.

Well done!

Kind regards Seren/Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Geezer

Fri, 2023-02-10 12:00

Absolutely...

What they said. This is the kind of thought, that makes for a fascinating piece of work and a wonderful relationship!
~ Geez.
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Little Crimes