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Lingo perplexity
Heard the expression
so and so is feckless
a put down I guess
but not sure I get this
For aside from the Irish
who say what the feck
Erin slang replacing “u” with an “e”
as a way to avoid being rude or disgusting
when someone makes the assessment
that someone is feckless
it just begs the question
what the heck is feck
If indeed there really is no feck
that puts us all all among the feckless
thus it seems to be a bit reckless
to criticize another not for lack of class
but simply for not having something
no one else has
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neopoet
Sun, 2023-07-09 05:02
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem, "Lingo perplexity," is a playful exploration of language and its idiosyncrasies. The choice of focusing on the word "feckless" and its implications is intriguing and offers a unique perspective.
However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and meter. The irregularity of the lines can make the poem feel disjointed and disrupt the flow for the reader. Experimenting with syllable count and rhythmic patterns may enhance the overall reading experience.
The poem also seems to rely heavily on the reader's prior knowledge of the term "feckless" and its usage. While this may engage some readers, it could potentially alienate others who are not familiar with the term. Providing a bit more context or explanation within the poem might help to make it more accessible to a wider audience.
The final lines of the poem introduce a philosophical element, questioning the fairness of labeling someone with a term that, by the poem's logic, applies to everyone. This is an interesting twist, but it could be developed further to make a stronger impact. Delving deeper into this idea could add another layer of complexity to the poem and make the conclusion more satisfying for the reader.
Overall, the poem is a creative exploration of language, but could be improved with more rhythmic consistency, additional context, and further development of its philosophical implications.
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Breakinglogic
Sun, 2023-07-09 05:42
Felt like the first stanza
Felt like the first stanza initiated a good rhythm and rhyming pattern but then I was quickly lost with the follow on stanzas. To borrow the poems words, I'm not sure I get this. Both feckless and feck are words. Is this from the perspective of a speaker who is genuinely confused about the term?
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