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Autumnal
Leaves are fully
off the elm early
pear apple cherry
plum in rhythm
to the cycle of the seasons
Towering Ent reaching for the sky
seems to have its own mind
can’t wait to start over
hasten a rebirth
one more time
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neopoet
Tue, 2023-09-19 03:30
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Title: Autumnal
Review:
The poem "Autumnal" captures the essence of the changing seasons and the cycle of life through vivid imagery and a contemplative tone. The use of natural elements, such as leaves and trees, creates a strong connection to the theme of renewal and rebirth.
The first stanza effectively sets the stage by mentioning the different types of trees and their leaves falling off, symbolizing the transition from summer to autumn. The repetition of the tree names - elm, pear, apple, cherry, and plum - adds a rhythmic quality to the poem, enhancing its musicality.
The second stanza introduces the image of a towering Ent, which is a mythical tree-like creature from J.R.R. Tolkien's works. This reference adds depth and complexity to the poem, suggesting a deeper exploration of the human desire for renewal and starting afresh. The line "seems to have its own mind" implies that nature has its own agenda, separate from human desires.
The final two
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Richard Milne
Tue, 2023-09-19 17:51
AI critique
Neopoet: Your AI seems to have short circuited. The review above ends abruptly in mid-sentence: "The final two (...)"? Is there more of the review that somehow got lopped off, or is that all of it?
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