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Life with no meaning

Life which I stand in front of lose my ends.

I forget about each step. Why, When, Then.

I have so many emotion, so many lose ends, and I stand.

In front of my own grave.

Forgetting that I am human.

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How would You spent your life if You would be alone, with no one to come to and lost your end. Just because your only talent is gone. And You lost the point to live. Music - is my grave
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I liked your poem. Very important self dialodue

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Computer critique:

"Life with no meaning" is a free verse poem that delves into the themes of loss, despair, and the search for purpose. The poem conveys a sense of confusion and aimlessness, reflecting the protagonist's struggle to find meaning in a life that seems to be slipping away.

The poem's language is raw and emotive, with phrases like "Life which I stand in front of lose my ends" and "In front of my own grave" effectively capturing the desolation and emptiness the protagonist feels. The repetition of the word "ends" throughout the poem emphasizes the sense of disconnection and loss.

The poem's structure is disjointed, reflecting the protagonist's scattered thoughts and feelings. While this stylistic choice works well in conveying the theme, it may be helpful to consider refining the structure to create a smoother reading experience. This could be achieved by focusing on the flow of thoughts and ensuring that each line builds on the one before it.

The poem's ending line, "Forgetting that I am human," is a powerful statement that encapsulates the protagonist's struggle with identity and self-worth. The mention of music as the protagonist's lost talent adds a personal and poignant touch, further emphasizing the sense of loss and disorientation.

In conclusion, "Life with no meaning" is a raw and emotional poem that effectively explores themes of loss, despair, and the search for meaning. The poem's language and structure create a strong sense of disconnection and desolation, which is reinforced by the powerful ending. With some refinement to the structure and flow, this poem has the potential to resonate deeply with readers who have experienced similar struggles.

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