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I once asked God?

I once asked God,
how far can you see?
with a puzzled look
he glanced down at me
he retorted back
distance wasn’t easy for me
but come along and we will see
where God and man began to be
I climbed up into his arms so strong
and thru the night he led me along
making our way thru eternity
when what with my wondering eyes did I see?
pools of intelligence, pure energy
waiting for someone or something to set them free
thru procreations act to be brought to life in ambiguity
though sons and daughters of god they would be
we ventured further into the night
to discover the first striking of eternal light
but what I saw I found hard to believe
there were others doing the same thing
propagating worlds in glory and majesty
there was no end, as far as I could see
to the human race to God’s family
with hearts knit together in unity
worlds without end
throughout eternity!

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Wonderful,,,,,,,, Needs to be sung by Satchmo !!

Obi.

so much for reading this and who is Satchmo if I might ask?

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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"who is Satchmo if I might ask?"

YOU MUSICAL HEATHEN YOU !!!!!!!!!,,,
( Louis Armstrong)

so glad that you liked the poem. I would say the same of the weed
if it didn't drive me insane!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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it means something literal to me!1

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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