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HONEY AND WHEAT

A honey-coloured cottage with a roof made of red tiles,
The door is painted yellow, it gives passers-by welcome smiles.
The path is old and worn out, its character complete,
A field across the road is where the farmer grows his wheat.

The cars they drive past slowly, to enjoy the view,
And the horses come to speak to me as horses often do.
The clouds touch the landscape at the edge of the scene,
And when it’s good and hot the air smells lush and verdant green.

Foxes dart through the meadow, hungry after sleep,
Eyes peep out between the stems, stealthily they creep.
The birds fly high above, prior to their swoop,
Before they come together in a murmuration group.

Sunset touches landscape as she grows heavy, cool, and tired,
As light leaves the vista, it is time to be inspired.
The cockerel crows it’s late, and he struts and scrapes his feet,
To see a sight as grand as this, I’m so happy on my street.

The moon he shines his silver rays and the meadow is an ocean,
The crop is captured in the wind stirring with emotion.
Brittle light picks out black fur and illuminates white stripe,
A badger becomes frisky and he shrieks a playful gripe.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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I'm trying to write in a happier mode instead of my usual ranting political themes. I hope I've managed it this time.
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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Honey and Wheat" paints a picturesque scene of a countryside cottage surrounded by wheat fields. The imagery is vivid and evocative, transporting the reader to the idyllic setting. The use of color in the description of the cottage, from the honey-colored walls to the red tile roof, is particularly effective in creating a sense of warmth and comfort. The poem's rhythm is consistent and flows smoothly from one stanza to the next, adding to the overall peacefulness of the scene.

One suggested line edit would be to change "The cars they drive past slowly" to "Cars drive past slowly." This slight revision would streamline the line and make it more concise.

Overall, "Honey and Wheat" is a lovely poem that captures the beauty of the natural world and reminds us to appreciate the simple pleasures in life.

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Thanks Bot. But I now have a West Country accent and I can't help myself from using it when I'm writing about where I live. So, "the cars, they drive past slowly" is natural to me :) I like the mixture of accents I have in my head, they're useful. :)

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Like looking at a painting, calming and serene. Alex,

Thank you, I try to use my brushes whenever I can, but to be honest, I cannot paint, draw or sketch to save my life. I have to do it with my words. Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

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I want to he there through the words that jumped out at me.. Nicely penned

Thank you Tigger for reading my poem and your lovely commens. I'm happy the images were strong enough to imagine yourself here. Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

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