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Watch the sun reclining into its shelter,
How it folds, journeying for rest,
Watch the stars dwindling when it's dawn,
Lights burning out, fading into afterlife
Time tells our story, ends our reign
There's no rest on life's street, no home to play,
Forever ever, plus ca change
Bells on pause, waiting to jingle the signals
The road calls to end when home comes

Homecoming, a day when nothing matters
Winds stretching burly hands, owls whistling softly,
Empty walks through, resting on the palms of the pilot,
A last chance to stare through the ride,
Moments of tears, joy, success, sheer regrets
Chuckling, tears washing away life's garment
All struggles, achievements whispering byes
Reality opens up, nothing to remain same,
The road calls to end when home comes

Homecoming, never live so free to forget,
Only dusts without stains will Angels follow
Every man builds his own home,
Every action leads to an abode,
Every way, a different paradise
The road calls to end when home comes

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The poem "Homecoming" explores the theme of finding solace and belonging in the concept of home. The imagery of the sun reclining and the stars fading into afterlife effectively conveys the passage of time and the transient nature of existence. The repetition of the line "The road calls to end when home comes" emphasizes the longing for a place of comfort and familiarity.

One suggestion for improvement would be to further develop the imagery and sensory details in the poem. For example, instead of simply mentioning "empty walks," you could describe the sound of footsteps echoing through the deserted streets or the feeling of the wind brushing against the protagonist's face. Adding more vivid descriptions can enhance the reader's connection to the emotions and experiences conveyed in the poem.

Additionally, consider varying the structure and rhythm of the poem to create a more dynamic flow. While the repetition of certain lines can be effective, it is important to balance it with other poetic techniques such as enjambment or varied line lengths. This can

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