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Glittering in Forever

Submitted by Seren on Tue, 2023-02-14 08:38

As I waded in the wake of forever
running my fingers through starlit water,
I sat on the golden rock of creation
Gods gathered round embracing in phase

In a whirl I was a spectrum of blue shift
showing closer an epitaph of a life lived,
through heaven and hell I morphed
finally the Gods placed me on Blue Star

They whispered the secrets of the night skies
told me this life lesson had been my task,
they spoke in tongues and told me
a recompense will be gifted in infiniteness

I spoke in the softest tones explaining
A fabric-brushed heaven is what I yearn
in the atoms of stardust that form me
youll find the shift of coronas in my eye

In my throat is the hum of the universe
in my mind is a fusion of galaxies
I sing of the cosmos and all its glories
I was stopped in a Orbit Inclination

I ached as their heads bowed to confer
At once, as a binary star I Metamorphose

Blest to not ever be solus

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Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-14 09:48

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this is like a burst of light, flashing Heavenward with images of love. A longing conveyed in the coded flashes of Cupid Code.
~ Higgest bugs, ~ Geez.
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Seren

Tue, 2023-02-14 11:11

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You got it in one. My love for the universe is the song I sang for Valentines I don't have a man so I give my love to the universe.

Thanks so much I was doubting myself again.

Love and higgliest bugs Sis xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Jackweb

Tue, 2023-02-14 11:37

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Versed in the classics! Your emotions are analysed on the intellectual stand point and passion is balanced out with reasoning and rationalizations.
I have read your several poems in this site, you seem to be an esoteric poet who essentially draws from a higher source. Indeed, you've the mastery of the language.

Exquisite!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Seren

Sat, 2023-02-18 07:14

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Thanks so much for your kind comment, I do appreciate it. and the time you took understanding it.

Thanks as always for your thoughts they are valued.

Kind regards Seren/Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Rosewood Apothecary

Tue, 2023-02-14 20:07

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I’ll be back. Standby

Seren

Sat, 2023-02-18 07:16

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Okey dokey!

Kind regards Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Seren

Sat, 2023-02-18 07:28

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I am a student of the stars I sometimes wonder if I shouldn't have taken astrology as we as music and drama education. Would have been an unusual few syllabus. lol

I am still learning so sometimes I take poetic license with my knowledge, not so much with this one there is a basis in fact to some of the references, Example;

Blue Star?

"Blue stars are stars that have at least 3 times the mass of the Sun and up. Whether a star has 10 times the mass of the Sun or 150 solar masses, it’s going to appear blue to our eyes. An example of a blue star is the familiar Rigel, the brightest star in the constellation Orion and the 6th brightest star in the sky"

I have pages and pages of data and resources that I refer to when I am learning about all that is known, and I even have some pages that Hypothesise on some other things, I am always onto the first videos that come out from scientists I follow.
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I was called a curious creature and never more truer words have been said about me lol

Hugs and Love Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Lightning Dust

Wed, 2023-02-15 16:27

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I am going to have to look up a couple of things in this but the rest is just deep af, your an old soul. Your passion for the Universe shines bright like your beloved stars.

I'll be back later after I've done some homework.

Love from L&J

Seren

Sat, 2023-02-18 07:29

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I am glad you learnt something from this one, that's a bloody first me teaching you something lol

hugs and love to you both OJ

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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