The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Title: My lost and found

The poem explores themes of sleeplessness, mental struggle, and personal transformation. The structure is composed of stanzas with varying line lengths, which adds a sense of unpredictability and emphasizes the disjointed nature of the speaker's experiences.

In the first stanza, the poem introduces the speaker's aversion to sleep and hints at the beginning of their mental struggle. The use of the phrase "sang-froid contorted" effectively conveys the idea of a calm exterior being twisted by internal turmoil.

The second stanza marks a turning point in the speaker's life at the age of fifteen. The phrase "irrevocably damaged" suggests a significant event that has lasting consequences. However, the poem could benefit from providing more context or details about this event to deepen the reader's understanding of the speaker's journey.

In the third and fourth stanzas, the poem describes the speaker's disorientation and detachment from reality. The imagery of "space without end" and "alternate realities" effectively conveys a sense of disconnection and loss. The use of the word "penumbra" adds a layer of darkness and mystery to the speaker's experience.

The fifth stanza introduces a reference to Alice's rabbit from "Alice in Wonderland," which adds a fantastical element to the poem. The mention of "time" as "just hands on a pocketwatch" serves to emphasize the speaker's disconnection from the passage of time.

The sixth and seventh stanzas depict the speaker's gradual return to reality and self-awareness. The personification of "grandfather time" pulling the speaker back adds a sense of external intervention in their recovery. The phrases "unbroken in ways" and "ruptured with fragile interfaces" suggest that the speaker has emerged from their experiences both stronger and more vulnerable.

In the final stanza, the poem concludes with the speaker acknowledging the loss of moments in their life but also finding themselves again. This offers a sense of resolution and hope for the future.

To strengthen the poem, consider providing more context or details about the significant event at the age of fifteen, as well as exploring the process of recovery and self-discovery in more depth. Additionally, refining the poem's structure and maintaining a consistent rhythm could enhance the overall flow and impact of the piece.

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While I often extoll the virtues of plain and simple language,
I most generally find the choices you make are almost self-explanatory.
You use them in such ways that one can almost derive the meaning right away
even if you are not familiar with the word. Penumbra is a word that I was vaguely familiar with,
but went to look it up anyway, just to make sure that I really understood it.
Thank you for this offering, I cannot imagine the experience; other to say I would liken it to
becoming aware of a reality that is/was so contrasted to something believed, that I could not wrap my mind around it.

I sometimes look back at my life and wonder about where the time went, how many things are gone forever?
How many pieces of reality are there that I have distorted to make them more palatable?
How many pieces of reality are unrecoverable, how many are there that I've no wish to remember?

Once again, you have made me think... Love and higgest bugs, ~ Geez.
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