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Fierce Heart
Thundering horse across the open plains,
I ride for you,
My fate balanced between hoof and reins,
They have taken you away from me,
Pitiful plight in a merciless world,
But I ride,
With courage like the desert sun,
Fierce and unforgiving,
I will free you from their deathly grip,
So do not cry for love and life,
As I thunder on,
Blazing fire of passion spurring,
Leaving dust and ash in my wake,
We will be joined again,
Heart and soul,
As you call out to me,
Oh lover.
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2022-07-20 17:12
Well the raw truth is…
That you absolutely crushed it here. There is literally nothing I don’t love about this. I just tried to pick a few lines to single out. I can’t. Every line is married so perfectly to the next and born so effortlessly from the line before. I’m just one poet and not formally educated but, I’m overwhelmed by the intricacies of this work. I read it 4 times during the course of this commentary.
Masterful,
Tim
C. Wolff
Wed, 2022-07-20 20:16
Thank you so much!! I very
Thank you so much!! I very much appreciate the kind words. :)
RoseBlack
Wed, 2022-07-20 21:36
I must agree with Tim
There isn't anything to dislike about this poem! It is simply wonderful. I can feel the emotion and sense of urgency to reunite! The unspoken bond that helps them find their way back together! Well done!
~RoseBlack~
C. Wolff
Wed, 2022-07-20 21:43
Thx!!
Thx!!
Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-07-21 07:37
dear C. Wolf,
my reaction to this tender and passionate work of art is the same as the rest of my bro's and sister's. it is pure determination and beauty! btw...welcome to Neopoet. I hope you will be around for a very long time. you have something to say, and I, for one, want to hear it!
respects, Cat
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C. Wolff
Thu, 2022-07-21 07:43
Thank you so much for the
Thank you so much for the kind words! Much appreciated.
Jackweb
Mon, 2022-08-01 02:11
Hello Wolff!
Indeed you're poetically empowered! This piece depicts your poetic proficiency.
Awesome romance of the heart full of wonderful incomparable thoughts, poetic dedication immersed in the awakening flame of impeccable poetic power,
a new addition rich in extraordinary artistic thought.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
C. Wolff
Mon, 2022-08-01 14:52
Thank you so much! I
Thank you so much! I appreciate the kind words. :)