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Explosion

Beginning

With soft felt ripples
Comes the swelling of awakened
Emotions

Each tremor becoming a catalyst
Fed by silent smiles and
Unsolicited words

Ignited by thoughts of imagined
Happiness comes the

End

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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Hi, Clentin,
Hmm...I will be curious to read your response. Ar first read, this felt like a laugh exploding. Then reading a few more times, it feels like the awareness of true happiness while with a special someone. Maybe something else? I am wondering why it had to end...
Thank you,
L

I wrote this about a family relationship that ended abruptly.

author comment

I am so very sorry.
Peace,
L

After reading your comment the meaning of this changed for me immediately. It’s really a very good observation on these types of relationships. Family needs boundaries too and older generations feel differently about this.

Tim

Thank you for you remarks

author comment

my family of women were like living with three rattlesnakes. survival was the only relationship or goal. this is why I have a difficult time relating to your poem, but I would like to understand your message. can you help me with this?

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

I wrote this after a passing of a very close relative

author comment

I am so sorry for your loss...

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

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