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eternity
every day they looked and found;
they discovered one another
with every passing night they dreamt
and saw their star-crossed lover
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Review Request (Direction):
How does this theme appeal to you?
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Tue, 2023-01-17 19:06
Too short...
I know that you said all that you had to say, but I wanted more! Good job. ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary
Tue, 2023-01-17 20:37
It’s stunning
One suggestion
every day they looked and found;
they discovered one another
with every passing night they dreamt
and saw their star-crossed lover
I felt that “and” to be extraneous. Aside from that small detail it’s really very pretty.
Tim
Candlewitch
Wed, 2023-01-18 11:55
hello,
excellent work!
*hugs, Cat
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