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Nevertheless
Stroking the borders of society
Remembering how he told me nowadays beauty is deformed
Surely then
It cannot exist in this world?
Looked in my vague direction
Pronounced that no one would like me enough
To overlook
The fact my legs don't feel like ebony
Preached hygiene in my face
When I am perfectly sanitary, I chose
To stand
When he told me to sit down
Observing the watch on my left hand
I counted the years it will take to pay off his debt
His lie
That I will not be seen as beautiful
Is it a problem, sir?
I will invite you to my husband's home when I have found
A man
Who does not disguise himself as a boy
Who notices but does not care enough
For an illusion of a beast to rise and dance before his eyes
Who loves
And lets love prosper
I listened to his faltering speech
I sensed his detachment before I saw him leave
I breathed
Without me criticising me for breathing
He tried to place me on the boundaries
And if they force me, on the borders I will live
I am
And will continue to be
With my hairy legs
With my blemished face
With my excess fat
Nevertheless.
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Free verse
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Comments
Geezer
Sun, 2023-01-22 09:44
I know...
that you must have heard the old phrase "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder." Well, it's true, I see it every day. What one person sees, is not always what another sees. You have been given excellent advice, in so much as not letting ANYONE, not just a man, making you feel as though you are not. Be who you are; if you choose to let your legs go unshaven and don't care, then the man who is attracted to you, probably doesn't care either. A good piece that tells the story of a person that doesn't let what others think shape their lives. Nice job, not a thing to change. ~ Geezer.
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Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-01-22 16:34
dear poet,
I agree with every word that Kat and Geezer have said to you. please print them out and tape them to your mirror and read them any time you feel a bit down. read them out loud and keep them as a mantra!
*hugs & love, Cat
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