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As I do

It's funny how a story starts
Without an end in mind
But most of all the power it yields;
The capability to bind
You to a single bookshelf
Until it's done and dusted
Although the memories will remain
Of that person in whom you trusted
A mistake of youth,
But the sixth sight
Will haunt you mechanically
Day and night
Alone you stand,
Quite solitary
And feign the mentality
Of a missionary
If truth be told
You're still on that page
You build yourself
A neural cage
Through which you may have once crawled out
As he did not deserve
The benefit of the doubt
Again, once more, the cycle spins
Governed by the hand of hope
Which wins
Over logical reasoning
And the fluttering pages
That will stay blank and untraced
Throughout all ages
In past, present and future alike
Still, the beast yearns for
A final strike
Since it knows me to
My very seams
And fishes for him
In my dreams
It sees the lies
Which I paint true
Yet no one could ever love him
As I do

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Review Request (Direction): 
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I like how the final cadence ended with the title. It makes the rhythm sound smooth. Beautifully crafted piece!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

At some underlying structure. It has a loosely repetitive quality to it. It’s easy to read but I did plow through some of your line breaks because the musician in me likes a recognizable pattern. I had to read it again and force myself to take it in the way you have transmitted it. Again, it’s quite indicative of rhythmic patterns and it’s just a nice flowing read.

Good luck with your labor of love. All I can say is that from my experience, it just takes a ton of work and patience, but when you find the groove and both partners are on the same wavelength it’s a boundless bounty and it really is infinite.

Tim

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