The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Dead or Alive" is a narrative piece that delves into dark themes, using vivid imagery and a strong sense of rhythm to convey a chilling story.

The first stanza sets the scene well, using sensory language such as "rubber screeches, and tyres howl" to create a strong sense of place and atmosphere. The use of personification in "The car races onward, with a growl" is also effective in adding to the ominous tone.

The second stanza introduces the antagonist of the poem, with the line "choosing victims to undress" suggesting a predatory nature. However, the phrase "he will break her fragile flesh" could potentially be rephrased to maintain the rhythm of the poem.

The third and fourth stanzas introduce the victim, with the line "Gives her the eye, the end looks bleaker" effectively conveying a sense of impending doom. The use of the phrase "the price is high, for sweet despair" is a strong choice, adding a layer of complexity to the victim's character.

In the fifth and sixth stanzas, the poem takes a violent turn. The line "switch the engine, to murder mode" is a particularly striking use of metaphor, effectively conveying the shift in the antagonist's intentions.

The seventh and eighth stanzas introduce a twist in the narrative, with the victim turning the tables on the antagonist. The line "her thirst, savours his every sin" is a powerful choice, suggesting a sense of retribution.

Overall, the poem effectively uses language and rhythm to convey a chilling narrative. However, there are a few areas where the rhythm could be improved to maintain the flow of the poem. Additionally, while the dark themes are handled well, the poem could potentially benefit from a bit more subtlety in its depiction of violence.

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I've got to like this one! A great story, with a twist. A couple of little bobbles, there are a few lines that don't flow as smoothly as I would like. The unevenness is a little distracting but can be fixed easily. Often, a word added or subtracted can make all the difference.
I would do these things:
The car racing ahead, with a growl.

In silent stealth, he kerb crawls
choosing victims to undress
Now is the time, his rage calls
he has to break her fragile flesh

A frenzied psycho, with bad breath

Of course, you may use or discard any or all of my suggestions,
but I think if you will change a few things; your lines will smooth out.

I love the theme and have written something similar a while back.
Great job, and well done! ~ Geez.
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Hello, Ruby,
I could see the entire grim meeting unfold. What a fantastic twist to the theme. Nice tight rhyme throughout. The way I read it, there are a few sentences with commas in the middle which don't seem necessary, for example, "and his silver tongue tempts her in." But maybe I am not reading correctly. (?) This is a smooth dark poem, very sleek.
Thank you,
L

Made my dark little heart skip a beat! I love everything about this...the story...the language...the flow...just fantastic!

Your poem was great, a challenge to Rose Black and a bit of the dark world

I love your way with words... your ideas and devious mind...I would team up to hunt with you any evening!

* a tip of my hat to you, eddy styx