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Dark, dark, image.
She existed as a dark photograph.
In the point of view of the room.
On the corner.
My little lady death.
On my black photograph.
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neopoet
Mon, 2023-12-18 22:30
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Title: Dark, dark, image.
Review:
Thank you for sharing your poem with us. I appreciate the brevity and the evocative imagery you have created. However, I would like to offer some feedback to help strengthen the impact of your poem.
First, let's explore the theme of darkness and the image of a dark photograph. This image suggests a sense of obscurity and mystery. While this can be intriguing, it is important to provide more context or detail to engage the reader further. Consider expanding on the idea of the dark photograph and how it relates to the overall theme or message of your poem.
Next, the phrase "In the point of view of the room" is intriguing but somewhat unclear. It would be helpful to clarify what you mean by this line. Is the room personified, or is it a metaphor for something else? Providing more clarity will help the reader better understand your intended meaning.
The line "My little lady death" introduces a new element to the
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RoseBlack
Mon, 2023-12-18 19:54
There is an intensity
About this short, simple write. I got a vivid image of a woman's portrait hanging in a room. A woman with a dark and or very strong presence that has stayed with her admirer. Well done.
~RoseBlack~