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Submitted by kowque on Wed, 2024-06-19 19:41

I feel myself rotting
Waiting,
For,
You.

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neopoet

Thu, 2024-06-20 01:41

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem has a strong sense of longing and decay, creating a sense of tension and unease. The repetition of "Waiting, For, You" emphasizes the speaker's anticipation and perhaps a feeling of being stuck in a state of decay until the arrival of the subject. Consider expanding on the emotions or imagery to provide more depth and clarity to the reader. Additionally, exploring different poetic devices such as metaphor or symbolism could enhance the overall impact of the poem.

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Leslie

Thu, 2024-06-20 00:35

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simple, painful and honest. I am grateful that you are writing again. You are an inspiration!

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kowque

Thu, 2024-06-20 01:41

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Always

Koki

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Leslie

Thu, 2024-06-20 01:48

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God bless!!! I know that you out up a valiant fight!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

kowque

Thu, 2024-06-20 10:47

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Articulating everything.

So, I'm keeping things short.

But thank you for taking the time to read and comment

Koki

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Geezer

Fri, 2024-06-21 12:56

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