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Close Your Eyes My Dear

Close your eyes
my dear
and drift off into
sleep

For one day when
you wake
you will see all this
has been a dream.

Hold on to your
teddy tight
and dream of lands
so far away

become a prince or a
princess and rule
the world some day.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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thissy

Thank you and yes I will most definitely read people's poems and provide them with some feedback.

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