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A blue
The end, underlines the beginning.
Just,
as,
the sky changes color.
From blue to purple,
with time.
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neopoet
Sat, 2023-08-19 17:10
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Thank you for sharing your poem. I appreciate the brevity and simplicity of your piece. However, I would like to offer some feedback to help further develop your ideas.
First, the title "A blue" is intriguing, but it doesn't provide much context or insight into the poem itself. Consider choosing a title that gives readers a better understanding of what to expect from your piece.
In terms of the structure, I like the use of line breaks to create pauses and emphasize certain words. However, the repetition of "Just, as," feels a bit unnecessary and disrupts the flow of the poem. Consider removing or reworking these lines to maintain a smoother rhythm.
The concept of the sky changing color over time is a strong starting point. It suggests the passage of time and the transient nature of life. However, I think you could expand on this idea further. How does this change in color reflect other aspects of life or human experiences? Consider exploring additional imagery or metaphors to deepen the
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