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The blank book (January contest 2023)

three hundred and sixty five pages book
this syllable with twelve scenes
each scene with four acts at least
read with determination
though nobody knows the end
it's known only by the author

I try reading all the pages
word by word from intro-
through the appendix
version by version both the old
the more I try to catch up the words
they disappear and the faster time flies
hoping to understand the past,
present and future more
yet the result's always different

interpreting the meanings
takes wisdom and patience
discipline and positivity
grace and hard labour
the portrayment of this book
refer to our daily struggle
at least what we are is written

the prayer of all readers
is that the new book
gives hope and blessings
love and harmony
wealth and breakthrough
to any who cross-open over
and with a positive mentality
new book, new life, new revolution.

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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
This is my new revolutionary poem of the year.
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Comments

Hello, Simon,
Full of hope and anticipation! A wonderful poem to begin anew!
L

It's my pleasure to hear from you again thanks for your comment.

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of a blank book to start the new year, is a great theme. We can write what we like in it and take some messages from another person's book to help us through our lives during the year. The pace is steady and not too fast, the language use is good.
The idea that we can write what appears in our own book gives us hope that we can do better this year. Logic and understanding is our happiness. ~ Geez.
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Poetry comes from a wide open mind, that's how we gets inspections. thank you so much for your comment I appreciate.

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A gift we are given at the start of each new year...I love how you used this to depict your hopes and dreams and what we can do with a fresh beginning.

~RoseBlack~

Life is poetry and poetry is life, all our hustles and struggles still depends on Grace and mercy.
Thank you for your comment.

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This rang out clear and true. You have a gentle kind way to express yoursself!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

You are very correct, many people said that to me most times.
Thanks again

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