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Being invisible

Being invisible would be great for me
All the things I would be able to see

I could observe what my friends would be saying
Sometimes it would be a bit dismaying

Other times I was greatly impressed
By what I heard being addressed

I could view my family’s sadness
And see how I could relieve their madness

I could checkout all the women I see
Without them able to see me

Is being invisible right for me?
Am I the man I want them to see?

Is being invisible really a blessing
Or is it really distressing

Being invisible it only a thought
Thank goodness being invisible I am not

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Being Invisible" explores the concept of invisibility in an introspective manner, using it as a metaphor to delve into the themes of personal identity, voyeurism, and the ethical implications of unseen observation.

The rhyming scheme of AABB is consistent throughout, providing a rhythmic flow to the narrative. However, the rhythm is occasionally disrupted by inconsistent line lengths. For example, "I could observe what my friends would be saying" is significantly longer than "Sometimes it would be a bit dismaying". Maintaining a consistent meter could help to improve the overall flow of the poem.

The poem could benefit from a more nuanced exploration of its central theme. The speaker's observations are largely surface-level, focusing on what they could see and hear if they were invisible. Delving deeper into the emotional and psychological implications of invisibility could add depth to the poem and make it more engaging for readers.

The final two stanzas introduce a moral question about the ethics of invisibility, but this is not fully explored. Developing this aspect of the poem could provide a more satisfying conclusion and tie the poem together more effectively.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from more vivid and specific imagery. The current descriptions are quite general, and more detailed imagery could help to bring the poem to life and engage the reader's senses. For example, instead of "I could view my family’s sadness", the poet could describe specific scenes or moments that illustrate this sadness.

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