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ANGELS FEEL TOO

Submitted by Sheddie on Fri, 2023-10-06 17:38

In night's depths, where empathy resides,
A burden so hard, heavy, caring hearts must bear,
They soothe the wounds, where tears and sorrow hide,
Angels in disguise, their love they share.
Ambassadors of peace, healers, carriers of goodluck.

Through sleepless nights, they lend a listening ear,
So much love given out, so much tears taken in
Absorbing pain, as if it were their own,
Their strength, a beacon in the darkest fear,
Angels feel too, though seldom they have shown.

In kindness sown, in selfless acts they tread,
Their sacrifice, a testament of grace,
Their wounds, bringing joyous testimonies..
Yet often, weary shoulders bear the dread,
Angels feel too, in this relentless chase.

Through every trial, in every tear they view,
Being strong for the people, giving comfort.
Remember this, my friend, it's ever true,
In caring souls, in all that they pursue,
Angels feel too, as they support and renew.

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "ANGELS FEEL TOO" captures the emotional depth and selflessness of angels as they provide comfort and support to others. The imagery and metaphors used effectively convey the burden and strength of these celestial beings. The poem flows smoothly, maintaining a consistent tone throughout.

One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the structure and rhythm of the poem. Currently, the poem follows a consistent pattern of four-line stanzas with an ABAB rhyme scheme. While this structure provides a sense of cohesion, experimenting with different stanza lengths or incorporating occasional enjambment could add a dynamic element to the poem.

Additionally, you may want to explore more vivid and specific language to enhance the imagery and evoke a stronger emotional response. For example, instead of using phrases like "night's depths" and "darkest fear," consider using more evocative and descriptive language to paint a clearer picture for the reader.

Overall, "ANGELS FEEL TOO" is a heartfelt exploration of the emotional experiences

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