The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Adored" presents a narrative that seems to explore themes of mortality, adolescence, and desire. The use of personification in the first line, where death is described as an 'old roué', is effective in setting a tone of foreboding and intrigue. This is further enhanced by the introduction of the 'glamorous alien' which could be interpreted as a symbol of the unknown or the other.

However, the transition from the first two lines to the rest of the poem could be smoother. The connection between the 'old roué' and the 'glamorous alien' is not clear, which may confuse readers. To improve this, consider providing more context or using transitional phrases.

In the middle of the poem, the shift from third person to first person perspective is sudden and may disrupt the flow of the poem. To maintain consistency, consider sticking to one perspective throughout the poem.

The last four lines effectively capture the naivety and self-centeredness often associated with adolescence. However, the phrase 'bloom of youth' is a common cliché. To enhance the originality of the poem, consider replacing this phrase with a more unique description.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from more concrete imagery. While the abstract concepts of death, desire, and adolescence are interesting, concrete images could help ground these concepts and make them more relatable to the reader. For example, instead of stating 'too many hormones', show how these hormones manifest in the speaker's behavior or physical state.

Overall, the poem has potential but could benefit from clearer transitions, consistent perspective, more original language, and concrete imagery.

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Great to see you dipping a toe into something out of your comfort whatnot, "a short".
Its good, keep going.

Obi.

I have always had an affliction for long haired rock stars and have spent most of my life chasing bands, one in particular. And while I met my rock idol when I was seventeen and had a good relationship with the band until their retirement, I could never get one to pay attention to me. What a fun poem and memory.

that it could be Meatloaf.
Too bad that you doubled-up on the [old rou`e].

I liked this, a puzzle and a poem.
I could taken another stanza or two, I wouldn't complain. ~ Geez.
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