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SPREADING PLAGUE
I sit in fear it may come here
this plague advancing much too near
it has advanced without remorse
can nothing keep it from its course ?
For decades it was held in check
my hob-nailed boot upon its neck
but now it seems it's running wild
infecting woman, man, and child
So I sit behind my palace walls
hoping that this contagion stalls
but unlike all of the times past
I fear it may get me at last
Now I hear it at my door
running boots on marble floor
echos and shouts out in the hall
the plague of Freedom comes to call
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Structured: Western
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Bonitaj
Fri, 2011-03-18 09:48
Good, Timeous piece Stan
I think many of us are ensconsed behind out "glass walls" - liked your description better - Palace Walls - i.e. you've still got is so good! Nice imagery!
Boni
Bonitaj
scribbler
Fri, 2011-03-18 18:33
Hello Boni
Thank you. I hope the virus spreads far and wide..............................scribbler
Geezer
Fri, 2011-03-18 11:40
Look out...
all you dictators! The plague is here! Yes, it is at the palace gates, threatening to come over the wall, and infect everyone. I love this one, it speaks to the growing trend of Democracy the world over. Your title drew me in, the word usage was really good, and it flowed well, with the rhyming superb. All in all, a very good write! ~ Gee
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scribbler
Fri, 2011-03-18 18:35
hi Geeze
I just hope the freedom is not hijacked. thank you for the visit and kind remarks................scribbler
scribbler
Fri, 2011-03-18 18:36
hi Shirl
always good when you drop by..............stan
scribbler
Sun, 2011-03-20 09:11
Rosi
yes,it semms to move from place to place with its present center of contagion being northern Africa and Arabia.............stan