The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem effectively conveys a sense of grief and loss through vivid imagery and emotional language. The use of sensory details like the heavy atmosphere and the whispered name creates a somber mood. The repetition of the phrase "If only it were still beating" at the end adds a poignant touch to the piece. Consider exploring more varied poetic devices such as metaphors or symbolism to deepen the emotional impact and create a more nuanced portrayal of the theme. Additionally, paying attention to the flow and structure of the poem could enhance its overall effectiveness.

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The overwhelming realization that our loved one isn't coming back and then having to face it head on at their services ..the desperation in wanting them to come back...wanting to turn back the hands of time. You can feel the anguish and the pain in your poem. Hope all is well and your book publishing is going well.