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I'll Always Believe You

Submitted by Kristen H. on Wed, 2024-09-04 16:04

as the days press on
it's getting easier
to look you in the eyes
and to hear your voice
but please
stop telling me you love me
because I still believe you

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft
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Not Explicit Content
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Wed, 2024-09-04 22:10

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "I'll Always Believe You" demonstrates a clear emotional narrative and a strong use of imagery. However, there are a few areas where it could be improved.

1. Structure: The poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm or meter. This would help to create a more engaging flow and could enhance the emotional impact of the poem.

2. Language: The language used in the poem is relatively straightforward. While this can be effective in certain contexts, the poem might benefit from more varied or evocative language. This could help to create a more vivid picture in the reader's mind and could make the emotional narrative of the poem more compelling.

3. Imagery: The poem could benefit from more specific and concrete imagery. For example, instead of saying "as the days press on", the poet could describe a specific scene or moment that represents the passage of time. This would help to ground the poem in specific details and could make the emotional narrative more relatable to the reader.

4. Theme: The theme of love and belief is clear in the poem. However, the poem could benefit from a deeper exploration of this theme. For example, the poet could explore why the speaker still believes the person they're addressing, or could delve into the consequences of this belief. This would add depth and complexity to the poem.

Overall, the poem has a strong emotional core, but could benefit from more attention to structure, language, imagery, and theme.

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captain 2

Thu, 2024-09-05 03:01

you still believe the words said before? perhaps during a fight or...drunk conflict? Thats where my mind goes -- probably because I have had those experiences. I can't look at her. I can't forget the horrible things she said. So, I will always be skeptical now. Which of these versions of her are the truth? Not sure if that is what you were getting at, but your poem resonates with me right there.

Best,
Captain

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