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You are the kick to my start
You are my king
I am your queen
You've given me your true and fulfilling love through this ring
My love for you is simply just not anything but far from simply in between
Even on the days I pull you from your toughest seams
I still see you within my own set of dreams
Even when it seems on my darkest days, we never truly part our ways
When we are closer I feel complete from our hearts beating as one, when our hearts begin to sing an ever so beautiful harmony
One day we are going to be united in the arms of the Lord in Holy Matrimony
For better for worse
Our hearts will forever sing this chorus
No matter No choice of any other voice that I would rather hear when there is just simply too much noise
And if ever we may ever happen to feel there may become another choice
For sicker and for the poor, you can always rest your mind assure
I will always love you til the death do and due us apart
Just know that you will always be the kick to my start
Near, far or completely clear
You will forever be my one true good set of a tear
Thank you for listening my cuddle bear
I will always remain here
So stay firm away from the fear
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Thu, 2023-04-06 22:41
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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "You are the kick to my start" is a heartfelt expression of love between two individuals. The use of metaphors and imagery throughout the poem adds depth and emotion to the words. The repetition of the phrase "For better for worse" emphasizes the commitment and dedication the speaker has to their partner.
However, the poem could benefit from some editing. For example, the line "My love for you is simply just not anything but far from simply in between" is a bit confusing and could be simplified. Perhaps change it to "My love for you is anything but average, it's beyond measure."
Overall, the poem conveys a strong message of love and commitment. The use of figurative language adds depth to the emotions expressed. With a few minor edits, this poem could be even more impactful.
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