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TREASURE

Submitted by Geremia on Thu, 2012-03-08 17:09

TESOURO

O homem quem gasta a vida
Procurando um tesouro
Perde aquêle que deixou
Atrás
Não sabendo

Eu sou os raios dourados
do sol
meus olhos lapis lazuli
e meus labios rubis de sangue vermelho
meu coração opalas puros
brilhando reflexões na luz
da minha malancolia

TREASURE
The man who spends a lifetime
Looking for a treasure,
Loses the true one he left behind
not knowing.

I am the golden rays
of the sun
my eyes lapis lazuli
and my lips of
rubies crimson blood
my heart pure opals shining
reflections in the light
of my melancholy

I am your lost treasure

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

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wesley snow

Thu, 2012-03-08 17:37

This is familiar.

Am I on drugs? A curious work, but I could swear I've read it somewhere before. wesley

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Geremia

Thu, 2012-03-08 19:00

You read it here first, Wes. I wrote the Portuguese and did a translation. I have an extic imagiation. The style sohould b familllar. It sugests strongly the ancient Persian poetry or the SONG FSONGS IN THE TANAK[ LD TESTAMRNT]

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Geezer

Thu, 2012-03-08 18:50

You are...

indeed, a lost treasure. The emotion shows clearly. A little lighter tone than usual, but that is what I have been longing to see from you. ~ Gee

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Geremia

Thu, 2012-03-08 19:02

Yes,Gee. Sometimes there is

Yes,Gee. Sometimes there is more intense emoton under a lighter face.

joe

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China Blue

Fri, 2012-03-09 14:38

Joe

One word
Beautiful

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

Geremia

Fri, 2012-03-09 14:46

thanks, :)

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loved

Fri, 2012-03-09 18:14

No way

No way
are you a lost treasure,
you are the one found
but' 'tis sad,
most miss the secrets of treasure
you share in equal measure
with all over here..
yes with me too
I assure you...

loved

Geremia

Fri, 2012-03-09 18:27