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Sunder a la Grace

Grace,
You kept me together when the sky was falling
Some anchor in the sea, a hand that feeds
You said “watch the skyline, soon there will be wine”
And that’s all I’d need.

The ships sank at the center of the ocean
And I was drowning, half way to being free
Some say, at the bottom there’s heat
Others that there’s nothing left to see

Tear a hole in the sky tonight
Pull the stars and place them by your eyes
And lay me by your side
Make everything all right

And here lies, my dead spies
The arrogance, and innocence
We once lived in a way, and dearly tried
We were only sinking ships

You fell apart through grace,
Keeping me in my rightful place
The beating heart encased
I’ll clear the bottom of the ocean

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I liked your title and subject matter. Eloquently expressed... great language useage. I like these lines best:

Tear a hole in the sky tonight
Pull the stars and place them by your eyes
And lay me by your side
Make everything all right

always, Cat

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the lines You kept me together when the sky was falling
Some anchor in the sea, a hand that feeds
You said “watch the skyline, soon there will be wine”
And that’s all I’d need.

remind me of a dear friend that bears the title's name very nice thank you

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