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Beneath the Crashing Waves

Beneath the crashing waves
I am weightless.
Flowing with the circular current,
The sun shines through the crystal surface,
Refracting endless colors all around me.

My bodies six feet higher,
The waves crash into my chest.
Looking up to see God, so blue above me,
I hear the ocean moan.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 


but the line
Flowing with the circular current,
is a lie, being crushed beneath waves is horrible, scary and death threatening. Change that one line and I would love this.

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